is tv good or bad?
i think that tv is good. tv shows like the news can tell you what is going on around the world. on some kid shows or adult shows can help learn something.some tv can teach your kids when their at home , and they could get education at home. when you don't have work or even when someone is babysitting. so much commercials are sometimes distracting and bad, but it can tell you what new things are availiable and then you know that theres new education channels that are availiable and you might even turn to that channel and let your children watch it!
Hi Alliana,
ReplyDeleteI was hoping to come here and find all 5 paragraphs of your essay on TV. Here are my comments for the paragraphs you were able to finish:
1. Your introduction paragraph started out great. Your opinion about TV is very clear. I then see two reasons why you think TV is good: The first is that TV tells you what's going on around the world and the second is that TV can help you learn something. I did not find a third reason.
I see that your second paragraph is about commercials telling you what new things are available. You didn't mention commercials in your intro paragraph as one of the reasons TV is good, so I'm confused about where it comes from in your second paragraph.
Based on your intro paragraph, I would expect to see a paragraph with examples of how the news tells you what's going on in the world.